For all teenagers. what do you think of my writing ( i want to die)?

OMG! That was so dramatic! What a way to start a story! The beginnig just captures the reader's attention. This is really touching because it represents how teenagers all over the world feel. I would definately continue reading this story.YOUR WRITING IS GREAT! Don't let anyone tell you otherwise, although, I think you should put Melinda's thoughts in italics. eg I would put "Now, it is time. I have to end everything, I must die" in italics, or just re-write it in first person. : )